Autobiography drift-one(part 2)
When I was a junior-high student, I studied hard everyday to enter a good senior high school. Finally I was accepted to National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School, and I closed the Department of Applied Foreign Language. My classmates were good at sport, singing and of course English. We won fifth place in the National English Drama Competition. All of us focused on it. And the competition made our friendship better than before. Last month, we went to National Kaohsiung First University of Science and Technology. It made me had a big shark. There environment, teachers and the department’s introduce were attract me. That inspired me to try my best to enter the National Kaohsiung First University of Science and Technology.In the future, I hope I can make great progress in my schoolwork and strengthen my English communication and math ability. I hope that I can get the high grade to pass the Joint Entrance Examination to colleges, and get into the National Kaohsiung First University of Science and Technology. I will do my best to reach my goal.
posted by 郭包子 @ 8:39 PM
6 Comments:
1.It made me had a big [shark].
-->你是要說shock吧!!
2.I hope that I can get the high [grade]...
-->grades
3.I will do my best to [reach my goal].
-->用achieve my goal比較好吧!
4.National Kaohsiung First University of Science and Technology.出現了3次耶! 感覺很像在佔版面..所以第2個可以用there或之類的..
were attract me→ attracted
It made me had a big shark.→ shock
寫的不錯就幾個錯字~
哈哈～被你發現了（佔版面）ＸＤＤＤＤＤ
big shark....
→shock... 還大鯊魚勒= ="
還不錯* 高第一真的還蠻搶戲的...XD
*It made me had a big (shark)是shock吧? 差好多耶 !
*National Kaohsiung FirstUniversity of Science and Technology 這句一直重複出現，可以用個代名詞來代替這句話。
"There environment, teachers and the department’s introduce were attract me."
後面的introduce是動詞,改成introduction吧~~
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