Autobiography drift-one(part 1)
I am Sin-Wun Guo, a seventeen-year-old girl, was born in Tainan. My father is a serious person. He appeared to be unfriendly with every one, but he is an honest man. He always taught me that the appearance of a person is not necessary, however having a sincere heart is more important than everything. My mother is a housewife. She was a kindergarten teacher. So she has more patience than other people. Even thought she will angry with my foolish behavior, she still patient forgives me. Their characters affect me a lot. They hope I can be a kind person. When I was a child, my parents paid much attention to the development of my character. And I have a young brother. He is a junior high student. He is good at painting. Sometimes I will ask for him does some production for me. I love the warm and comfortable feeling of my family. I must say I am lucky enough to grow in such a great home.My favorite hobby is playing badminton. It helps me in a good mood. When I was very young, my father was teaching me how to play it. On the other hand, I also like the quiet activity. I can play badminton without under sunshine. Even my parents like this exercise, too. It will further our relationship. If all of us have free time, my family plays badminton every Sunday.
posted by 郭包子 @ 6:12 PM
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.[Even thought] she will angry with my foolish behavior,.....
-->你要說的是Even though吧?!
2.On the other hand, I also like the quiet activity.
這一句插在那裡會很奇怪,而且quiet activity有哪些,可以舉例說明
she still patient forgives me.
→she still forgives me patiently.
And I have a young brother.
不要用and，不太順
my father was teaching me how to play it.
→my father taught me how to play it.
I can play badminton without under sunshine.
這句好奇怪u
He always taught
→ 都用always了 應該接現在式吧
It helps me in a good mood.
→to be in a good mood 之類的
He always taught
→ 都用always了 應該接現在式吧
It helps me in a good mood.
→to be in a good mood 之類的
Even thought she will angry with my foolish behavior→Even thought I do foolish behavior 我是覺得你用未來式感覺怪怪的~
every Sunday→Sunday加s
寫的很好耶~~~
第二段的"When I was very young, my father was teaching me how to play it."
我覺得,應該用不到ing才對
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