The Computers draft-one
Computers are playing a more and more important role in modern life. With it, we can communication, entertainment, and find the information, and so on. For example, they can send and receive email with computers to save a lot of time. They can also chat with their friends to keep in touch. If you need entertainment, there have many games and films that offer from other people and you can download on the Internet. When you are boring, it will be a good choice.Personally, I have a liking for computers. It takes only a few hours to learn to use the computer. The most important function of the computer is to store and retrieve the information that we need. Besides, we can write a report on the computer without a pen. And teachers can use the computer to teach students. They can use it to prepare test sheets, too. It’s very useful to our daily life. To be sure, the personal computer has become a very good companion we can't do without.
posted by 郭包子 @ 9:00 PM
6 Comments:
請注意第幾人稱要一致,你在前面用到的是"we",而後面卻變成了"they","their"
一度以為電腦開始與their friends聊天以藉以keep in touch ?!
"...there have many games and films that offer from other people and you can download on the Internet. "
→there are
"When you are boring, it will be a good choice."
→是bored,ed是某人覺得...,ing是令人感到...
we can .....and( finding ) the...
都用名詞，
they can...they can also chat..
主詞改成we
我覺得可以改成，
we can...and also chat with...
and you can download..
主詞改we
we can't do without (it).
* 人稱前後一致 !!
* you can download >> " We "
* We can do without >> " it "
With it, we can communication, entertainment...
→後面兩個都是名詞吧?
放can後面怪怪的,,可以在can前面加個do_
人稱要一致噢!
主詞要一致哦
When you are boring
boring→bored
we can communication,entertainment
→communication和entertainment改成動詞的形式
就主詞沒一致
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