A Dream I Had
Someday I fell asleep, I had a strange dream. In the dream, I born a pair of wings and had strong power. I could fly all over the world by the wings. When I was passing a country, I saw a handsome prince in the trouble. He was fighting with a group of beasts. In order to relieve him, I used all of my power and energy. But the beasts were not smart enough to beat me. I constrained then fell off the cliff. The prince promised to get married with me so as to appreciate me. But on the wedding day, unexpectedly the handsome prince changed into my father! He kept yelling at me. Therefore, I waked up in a frighten. I thought it showed that it’s time to get up for school.
posted by 郭包子 @ 9:01 AM
4 Comments:
"... I saw a handsome prince in the trouble."
我認為不用加the
"I used all of my power and energy.But the beasts were not smart enough to beat me."
應該不用加But了吧,加了會感覺the beasts are more powerful than you
Someday I fell asleep, I had a strange dream.
不用加and 噢？
But the beasts were not smart enough to beat me.
邏輯怪怪的，
我用盡力氣去就王子，
〝但是〞野獸不夠聰明. . .？
in a frighten
好像沒有這個用法耶
你可以用漸漸帶入夢境
，
讓故事有層遞性[好像在寫國文唷]
1)
I born a pair of wings with strong power...
2)
Passing a country,...
3)
I used all of my power and energy. But the beasts were not smart enough to beat me. ←very 怪
我覺得不要用but
→I used all of my power and energy. Nevertheless...
* Someday I fell asleep, I had a strange dream.
-> 要加個and。
* 不錯，故事有層遞性。
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